We never cared
When you were lost
We never cared
When you didn't come home
We never cared
When you went missing
We never cared
Until its too late
We never looked
When you vanished
We never looked
When you couldn't be found
We never looked
When you missed your birthday
We never looked
When the years rolled by
We never cried
When you didn't come back
We never cried
When they found you in the dirt
We never cried
When your bones were all that was left
We never cried
When they said you never had a chance.
2 comments:
There's real sadness and loss here but to deliver the message, you need to be more specific, more descriptive and less obscure. I like the repeditive nature of the lyric but it needs more; more work, more details and less abstraction. It ain't that easy. See my blog October 24th,'08 and September 11, '08. Obscure messages don't get delivered.
For example,
"We never cried
when they found you,
face down,
torn shirt,
face bloodied,
on the hard, battlefield dirt."
Maybe that's not your story, this story, but you get the idea. Better? Maybe not. Maybe that's me not you.??
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