Monday, July 12, 2010

We Never Cared

We never cared
When you were lost

We never cared
When you didn't come home

We never cared
When you went missing

We never cared
Until its too late

We never looked
When you vanished

We never looked
When you couldn't be found

We never looked
When you missed your birthday

We never looked
When the years rolled by

We never cried
When you didn't come back

We never cried
When they found you in the dirt

We never cried
When your bones were all that was left

We never cried
When they said you never had a chance.

2 comments:

Ross Howard said...

There's real sadness and loss here but to deliver the message, you need to be more specific, more descriptive and less obscure. I like the repeditive nature of the lyric but it needs more; more work, more details and less abstraction. It ain't that easy. See my blog October 24th,'08 and September 11, '08. Obscure messages don't get delivered.

Ross Howard said...

For example,

"We never cried
when they found you,
face down,
torn shirt,
face bloodied,
on the hard, battlefield dirt."

Maybe that's not your story, this story, but you get the idea. Better? Maybe not. Maybe that's me not you.??